Relationships...
...They make you laugh, they make you cry, they make you shake your head in wonder, they make you want to kill...or die.
...They bring you joy, they bring you pain, they make the sun shine, they bring on the rain.
...They gently caress you, they hold you tight, they screw things up, they set them right.
...They show you grass meadows, they show you the whip...
Aah! The ups and downs, the highs and lows...aah! relationships.
...They bring you joy, they bring you pain, they make the sun shine, they bring on the rain.
...They gently caress you, they hold you tight, they screw things up, they set them right.
...They show you grass meadows, they show you the whip...
Aah! The ups and downs, the highs and lows...aah! relationships.
posted by ShaluBhuchar at
1:03 PM
2 Comments:
Tried posting the message before as well....
this poem develops well but the ending is too cliched....also your poems are too similar to one another...thematically, style of writing and the state of mind when u r writing them....its as if u feel compelled to be philosophical and dark whenever u sit down to write
Thank you, anonymous. My poems would be similar to each other...they're all written by the same person - me! I respond/react to different situations in similar ways - stimuli encourage practiced response and so on...
anyhow, once again...thanks for the feedback
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